fall migration
the growing flock
of binoculars

First published in Mainichi Daily News, December 2007.


9 Responses

  1. Dylan Tweney Says:

    eclipse — the child staring at the astronomer's laser pointer

  2. columbusmatt Says:

    ha!

  3. xaipe Says:

    Oh, I really enjoyed this one. Thank you for sharing!

  4. Barbara A Taylor Says:

    Excellent!

    peace and love

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    Well executed haiku with a fine edge of haikai humour. ;-)

    Alan
    http://area17.blogspot.com

  6. mikefarley Says:

    Excellent. Straightforward, yet inside-out in true haiku spirit.

  7. Kathabela Wilson Says:

    oooooh I love the surprise in this one!… and the switch of attention… to the means: not the viewed ( fall migration) of birds…but the viewer(s) (lovely use of) (flock/ of binoculars)… dylan's poem does that too, the pointer getting all the attention of the child's eye…

  8. janereichhold Says:

    Deborah,
    Through this and your activity on Facebook I am getting a new appreciation of your haiku work! Thank you!

  9. janereichhold Says:

    Deborah,
    Through this and your activity on Facebook I am getting a new appreciation of your haiku work! Thank you!

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