watching dad struggle
to remember our names
december sky


8 Responses

  1. jonathanhirshon Says:

    Not a classic 5-7-5 haiku, but beautiful and evocative of both season and state – well done! :)

  2. valeria Says:

    very poignant. thank you.

  3. Barbara A Taylor Says:

    g'day

    this is excellent! So very real.

    Peace and Love

  4. S. Hannus Says:

    It is poignant …like a cloudy dreary December sky

  5. Ronit Bhattacharyya Says:

    Very touching. Thanks.

  6. lynnerees Says:

    Such a moving haiku that links the human experience with the cold season and the end of the year. But the mention of 'sky' at the close somehow shifts the emotional tone, from a closing down (the loss of memory) to an expansion (endless space, infinity), and that is comforting.

  7. Kathabela Wilson Says:

    Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…

  8. Kathabela Wilson Says:

    Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…

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