in the air rain in the rain air
—David Stark
Issue 9.1 | 31 December 2009 253Responses (4)http://tinywords.com/2009/12/31/253/2009-12-31+16%3A51%3A53David+Stark
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hi david have you tried your haiku in one-line? marlene
in the air me in meair
(totally derivative, but it just occurred to me)
also:
in the worldme in methe world
Good one.
It’s a great haiku, David, very insightful.
Do you know this one by Jim Kacian:
clouds seen through clouds seen through
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December 31st, 2009 at 7:14 pm
hi david have you tried your haiku in one-line? marlene
January 1st, 2010 at 9:43 pm
in the air
me in me
air
(totally derivative, but it just occurred to me)
also:
in the world
me in me
the world
January 3rd, 2010 at 1:34 pm
Good one.
January 8th, 2010 at 3:55 pm
It’s a great haiku, David, very insightful.
Do you know this one by Jim Kacian:
clouds seen
through clouds
seen through