the little spider
hunches sideways—
night shift


7 Responses

  1. grandpa Says:

    a spider and its shadow? Jumping to no conclusions…

    Grandpa

  2. Alison Says:

    Lovely and closely observant with a wonderful pivot.

    Brings back memories of night shift work and all the cleaning to be done…..with half-closed eyes!

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    Excellent!

    The choice of "hunches" really makes this a tighter haiku.

    I daresay most of us have done nightshifts and/or graveyard shifts. I really feel you have banded us together with this haiku. Thank you! ;-)

  4. Gergely László Says:

    pici pók
    inal oldalvást –
    éjjeli m┼▒szak

  5. petertwo.oh Says:

    Don't know whether it was intentional or not, but the use of shift in the line following on from 'hunches' works great – the sense of moving, changing position…

  6. Melinda B Hipple Says:

    Thank you all again for the lovely responses. Yes, petertwo, there is that subtle play on words.

    Thank you, Gergely, for the wonderful translations of both poems. Lovely to see them in another language.

  7. martin1223 Says:

    awning drip
    the jumping spider steps
    across the desk

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