dead birds at the base
of the lit skyscraper
autumn midnight


7 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    I don't know why but it reminds me of my friend Yu Yan Chen when she witnessed 911 and lost a friend to that attack.

    Setting that aside, I really like the musicality of this haiku, and the fact it isn't a minimalist haiku or a format fragment and phrase/phrase and fragment haiku.

    Looking forward to seeing more of your work on tinywords! ;-)

    Alan, With Words

  2. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    I too like that it is not minimalist, and I like the image and the evocations of the image, but 'lit' bothers me. It seems to scan to abruptly, like a caesura. How about 'bright', which would in addition raise the anti in terms of irony.

  3. d. f. tweney Says:

    circling
    in the columns of light
    a flock of birds

  4. martin1223 Says:

    car top guano
    canadian geese cross the Hudson
    http://www.springerlink.com/content/0ww007252k023

  5. d. f. tweney Says:

    Martin, I think it's fair to warn people that the link you posted is to a PDF of an epidemiology research paper!

  6. martin1223 Says:

    Your'e right and thank you!

  7. @Zirconium Says:

    hurrying home from the Nutcracker
    hoping the mice in the walls
    have magically disappeared

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