home from the city—
waiting at the station
Orion

 

 

 

 

 

Original version published in Shamrock.


14 Responses

  1. Aurora Says:

    This is really good, Dave.

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    Love the first line in particular. It feels as if this haiku is written for me as presently I go into the city as Santa and come back to a small town a plain man. ;-)

    Alan

  3. Dave Serjeant Says:

    Thanks for the comments, guys. It stems from my days in London, when I used to come home to visit the folks. I'd leave work with my ruck sack, battle the rush hour tube, race-walk along the platform at St Pancras station and settle in my spot to hide behind a book or lean my head against the window, emerging 200 miles later in my home town after dark.

    Good luck as Santa., Alan. My daughters had a letter from the real one today – his spelling is atrocious.

  4. snowbirdpress Says:

    When I came to the last line … all of a sudden the vast expanse of night sky opened up everything….I could feel the crisp cold air and felt like pulling my coat a little tighter against it. I enjoyed this haiku very much!

    Glad to hear Alan's playing Santa! Have a happy holiday, Alan. Merrill

  5. Alison H. Says:

    So magical! I love it.

  6. Garry Eaton Says:

    Definitely one to remember, Dave.

  7. jbtroost Says:

    I so recognize this:

    a smile finds my face
    at night walking the dog
    Orion

    Thanks for posting!

  8. Ellen Grace Olinger Says:

    Lovely. Reminds me of a poem I wrote after a family gathering in Milwaukee.

    home from the city
    the beautiful city
    stars my skyline

  9. vida Says:

    Beautiful, Dave!
    Enjoyed your prose too.

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