winter dream—
the pond’s breath trapped
in ice


9 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    Highly memorable and atmospheric.

    Alan

  2. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    Lovely, sharp.

  3. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    This one made me feel quite breathless!

  4. bouwebrouwer Says:

    Beautiful haiku!

  5. eikenlaan Says:

    You really captured the cold in this one!!

  6. larry wilmarth Says:

    i like this very much…well done

    winter dream…
    the toddler's snowman
    slowly recedes

  7. evancoram Says:

    I love this but wonder at the placement of "trapped" in the second line instead of as part of the third line. the images are striking and fresh and the thoughts come alive. very nice.

  8. Robert Says:

    Vivid image, so poetic.

  9. kizi Says:

    like this

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