grass blades
edged with frost
his apology


16 Responses

  1. Sheila Sondik Says:

    What a vivid haiku! I shivered.

  2. Susan Says:

    Hope the shivers didn't last long. <smile> Thanks, Sheila.

    Susan

  3. Dianne Says:

    spring thaw
    he brings me a branch
    cherry blossoms

    :-) thank you, Susan!

  4. Susan Says:

    A great response, Danne. Thanks!

  5. Jenny Angyal Says:

    Sharp!

  6. Susan Says:

    Lovely to 'see' you here, Jenny. Thanks so much.

    Susan

  7. Alison Hedlund Says:

    Exquisitely icy!

  8. jSusan Says:

    Thank you, Alison!

    Susan

  9. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Oh wow, Susan – this one packs a punch! :)

    marion

  10. Susan Says:

    Thanks, Marion, for dropping by. Appreciated!

  11. haikuapprentice Says:

    Such a striking poem. We can all feel the chill of the ice, from our toes up to our heart. I love the choice of the word "blade" which turns something as inocuous and domestic as grass into a weapon. And it is "edged" with frost. This reminds me of the blade Laertes "edges" with poison in his plot to kill Hamlet. Slow release venom. I recall Hamlet and Laertes both perished from the same edged weapon in Shakespeare's play, but not before each made and received a genuine apology from the other.

    So much is unspoken in this poem that there is a sense of incompleteness. What is the connection between the grass and "his" apology? Is the start of winter, or the last frost of the season? The uncertainty of context is I believe left there deliberately to let us share the ambivalence of the poet. She as yet has not decided whether the frost will thaw.
    This poem has prompted my own response:

    Retreating footprints
    Mark the frosted lawn
    With an ellipsis

  12. Susan Says:

    Thank you for taking so much time, haiku apprentice, with your response. I'm delighted this is working so well for you.

  13. @DreamsOfTaos Says:

    Very nice Susan.

  14. Warren Says:

    Terrific haiku, Susan – Again you prove to us why we look up to you (don't know how tall you are, but you get the drift).

    Warren

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