snowflakes all the places she was childless


8 Responses

  1. Annette Makino Says:

    Heartbreaking and lovely. So much said in so few words. Kudos!

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    Full of depth, layers, pain, and poignancy.

    Alan

  3. chief276 Says:

    A real beauty by one of our finest haiku poets

  4. Dawn Apanius Says:

    beautiful and haunting.

  5. Jayashree Says:

    Possibly one of the best decisions I have made in recent times – subscribe to your blog!
    What a treat every day to check my inbox and feast myself to some beautiful verses just like this one. I nearly choked on this one. And I read and re-read and re-read….

    Thank you so much!

  6. haikuapprentice Says:

    Polona this is brilliant poetry. I love the matching of form to content – a single unpunctuated "barren" line. Yet from the outset the focus is "snowflakes". And the key verb is in past tense – "was". So although my first reading was one of the poignancy, re-reading and dwelling on it for a few hours I now prefer an alternative interpretation. That perhaps "she" is no longer desolate, miserable at being childless. The ground is no longer barren but fertile in a new and different way. I sense in this that she has transcended the fate nature has dealt her; that in her life, as in the line of poetry, she is adding beauty, and enchantment to the world. We who delight in her snowflakes are all, poetically, her children.

    Truly wonderful

    Strider

  7. Alison Hedlund Says:

    So very poignant.

  8. @DreamsOfTaos Says:

    Always lovely, Ms. Cirrus Dream :)

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