planting delphiniums
in dark soil –
the taste of rain water


9 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    Great middle line that makes the first and last lines fill with resonance beyond the grouping of the words.

    Alan

  2. haikuapprentice Says:

    Marvelous poem Sandra!

    Such a potent evocation of a gardener planting out the seedlings during a shower – and what a wonderful way to render the sensual experience of a rain shower – visually in the colour of the soil, and by its taste. It is almost as if we are sharing the sensation of what it is like to be a seedling ourselves! The poet is totally immersed and connected to her garden and to nature.

    I also particularly like how you have inverted the structure of the work. The shorter middle line surrounded by the longer than usual first and final lines gives a sense of the plant growing out of the poem, and the whole work becomes almost a visual representation of the fruitfulness and generativity of the plant's life cycle.

    Inspired and inspiring haiku!

    Strider

  3. Alison Hedlund Says:

    A vivid synesthetic poem, redolent of spring.

  4. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    Cold sprinkler drops on toes
    California spring.

  5. Ellen Grace Olinger Says:

    How good the rain water must taste to the flowers. Here in Wisconsin we've had a lot of rain, and last year's drought seems over. A later Spring – the robins returned a little over a week later than last year. The tiny snowdrops bloomed through ice and old leaves. Other flowers in the future . . .

  6. renkuleader Says:

    Thanks, everyone for the kind words – and Strider for that marvellous commentary. I shall treasure it.

    My delphiniums have succumbed to the change of season (a very long summer has finally changed to autumn) but I did get two flowerings by following the advice I got from the garden centre.

    Thanks too, for taking the time to comment.

  7. renkuleader Says:

    Whoops, sorry, that post was from me, Sandra. (Not sure where that odd ID has come from …)

  8. Dawn Apanius Says:

    Beautiful! I love gardening in light rain.

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