midday heat still ticking abandoned bicycle


13 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    Enjoyed the haiku! :-)

    I don't know if this old Queensland roof is still ticking too…

    ticking
    keeping its own time
    the tin roof

    Alan Summers
    Publications credits: Hobo, march 96; Blithe Spirit Vol. 8 No. 1 (1998 Review); Micropress: best poems Ed. Kate O'Neill, (Micropress NZ 1997); sundog haiku journal: an australian year (sunfast press 1997 reprinted 1998)

  2. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Thanks, Alan. Enjoyed yours too!

    marion

  3. Brandon Bordelon Says:

    a country stop sign
    pocked by bee bees
    the heat

  4. Dawn Apanius Says:

    Nice, Marion!

    climax of cicadas-
    someone new
    in my daydream

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Thank you – and how lovely, Dawn!

    marion

  6. eikenlaan Says:

    Lovely Marion :) Maire

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Thank you, Maire! :)

  8. haikuapprentice Says:

    Wow, so evocative Marion! Now that I know you are from Ireland I imagine a setting like from the movie "The Quiet Man" – and, it seems to my reading, this poem carries an equally potent charge of sexual energy. I fancy I see a stonewall lane, and in the midday heat a large shady tree in a neighbouring field – the selected site perhaps for a secret rendezvous, hence the hastily abandoned bicycle, its wheel still ticking" around the inner ratchet.
    I particularly love that central phrase. To my middle-aged ears, it sounds like an older heart, still beating passionately in the "midday" of life. How delightful!

    Strider

  9. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Hi Strider – I love the narrative you have created from my abandoned bicycle! Thank you :)

    marion

  10. Gillena Cox Says:

    near-midday heat

  11. Robert Says:

    Intantanously hits you with a vivid and precise image. Wonderful!

  12. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Thank you, Robert. :)

    marion

  13. Jayne Says:

    Thanks for cogbnitutinr. It’s helped me understand the issues.

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