zazen– my knees won’t stop talking
—Sondra J. Byrnes
Issue 13.2 | 30 September 2013
This is a first-rate haiku, Sondra. I have experienced this while meditating and am awed by your concise way of expressing this sensation!
Absolutely lovely! _kala
Wonderful haiku – nice contrast between the silence of meditation & the "noise" of our knees (and bodies and mind!) Thought you'd enjoy the overlap: I published this haiku in bottle rockets in 2012:
retreat's end… the master's knees crackle line mie
Is that supposed to be "like mine"?
Thanks! I like yours, too. But, is the last line 'like mine' or 'line mie'?
"Like mine". — typo!
Great haiku. It inspired me to ponder my own knees:
total replacements my knees stopped talking started walking
I've only the one haiku with knee in it, and inspired by a Jodie Foster movie, as she fights injustice.
vigilante movie my elbow heavy on your knee
Alan Summers Publications credits: Symmetry Pebbles (2011); The Humours of Haiku (Iron Press 2012); Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
Ah yes, attempts at meditation can result in an over active mind, and our joints wanting to converse too.
Wonderfully enjoyable haiku.
warm regards,
Alan
Highly enjoyable, Sondra. :)
marion
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September 30th, 2013 at 8:15 am
This is a first-rate haiku, Sondra. I have experienced this while meditating and am awed by your concise way of expressing this sensation!
September 30th, 2013 at 8:43 am
Absolutely lovely!
_kala
September 30th, 2013 at 9:59 am
Wonderful haiku – nice contrast between the silence of meditation & the "noise" of our knees (and bodies and mind!) Thought you'd enjoy the overlap: I published this haiku in bottle rockets in 2012:
retreat's end…
the master's knees crackle
line mie
September 30th, 2013 at 10:47 am
Is that supposed to be "like mine"?
September 30th, 2013 at 10:50 am
Thanks! I like yours, too. But, is the last line 'like mine' or 'line mie'?
September 30th, 2013 at 3:13 pm
"Like mine". — typo!
September 30th, 2013 at 3:29 pm
Great haiku. It inspired me to ponder my own knees:
total replacements
my knees
stopped talking
started walking
October 1st, 2013 at 2:39 pm
I've only the one haiku with knee in it, and inspired by a Jodie Foster movie, as she fights injustice.
vigilante movie
my elbow
heavy on your knee
Alan Summers
Publications credits: Symmetry Pebbles (2011); The Humours of Haiku (Iron Press 2012); Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)
Ah yes, attempts at meditation can result in an over active mind, and our joints wanting to converse too.
Wonderfully enjoyable haiku.
warm regards,
Alan
October 4th, 2013 at 5:58 am
Highly enjoyable, Sondra. :)
marion
November 29th, 2016 at 6:28 am
You seem, by all accounts, to be additionally star in the procedure you scrawl.