Ooroo

As I wait for the evening bus to my hometown, a stray sidles up to me, sniffing with a dusty nose and occasionally brushing it against my jeans. She then settles down on her haunches and continues to gaze soulfully until I melt and treat her to a packet of biscuits. From there on she follows me faithfully till I board the rickety bus for a long journey back to the city I once knew.

 

mongrel town…
the passing car rattles
a cloud of dust


14 Responses

  1. Marie Shimane Says:

    I'm not exactly a cat lover — but I do love this!

  2. Deb Says:

    I thought it was a dog.

  3. snakypoet Says:

    Break my heart, why doncha?

    PS Clearly a dog.

  4. haikuapprentice Says:

    Marvelous haibun, Paresh. It is like a reading from Basho's "Records of a Travel Worn Satchel".

    I hope more people will be inspired to expand their haiku offerings like this, with such contextual descriptions and settings. It really allows us to meet the poet, instead of always injecting ourselves into the works we read.

    And I hope to read more of your work, Paresh.

    Strider

  5. sanjuktaa Says:

    Lovely work, Paresh! Loved that ku.

  6. Alan Summers Says:

    Wonderful work as always Paresh! :-)

    Your story reminded me of the one I had about a one-eyed mangy cat at a Way Station on the way to Uluru, Northern Territory, Australia.

    I was the only one to help the cat to some food, and I could tell it wanted to come onto the Greyhound Bus with me, but it wasn't possible.

    desertcold
    a one-eyed cat
    sifts an ashcan

    Alan Summers
    Publications credits: HI no. 31 (Japan, 1998)

    I liked the way you didn't have to state it was a dog, and then alluded back to the town, but with other socio-economic touches with this marvellous haiku:

    mongrel town…
    the passing car rattles
    a cloud of dust

    We have visuals, great sound with 'rattles' and sensation through choking dust.

    A fantastic haiku, and wonderful haibun! :-)

    warm regards,

    Alan
    .

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Ah, lovely, Paresh! You have created a wonderful moment here.

    Until I read the comments I didn't realise that you hadn't used the word 'dog' – although I don't think even a stray cat would let her nose stay dusty for long! :)

    marion

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