against
the blue
the blue
fly flies
against
the pane


7 Responses

  1. Frances Sinderwahl Says:

    Thank you for this wonderful wordplay. I see it, hear the incessant buzzing!

  2. Peggy Says:

    This is stunning Jim! and it is perfect with the photo. Bravo!

  3. payal aggarwal Says:

    Beautiful display of words.

  4. Frances Sinderwahl Says:

    Want to add, – I love this poem’s simple elegant “against the blue, against ‘the pane'” and more I wish I could express, beautifully and brilliantly told.

  5. Emma Pierson Says:

    I like therepetitio of blue and the noun-verb shift from fly to flies. a lovely blend of color image and flight.

  6. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Great sound and colour in this.I could also see the fly repeatedly hitting the pane.

    marion

  7. Lois Says:

    Real brain power on dilapsy. Thanks for that answer!

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