autumn equinox
his ex gives him
half a hug


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  1. Alan Summers Says:

    autumn equinox
    his ex gives him
    half a hug

    —J. ZIMMERMAN

    The useful thing about seasonal references is that not only can they pin down the season as a whole but narrow it down. In this case we have the season narrowed down to a day. We may not know which year, but unfortunately, even if the author forgets, one or both of the ex-partners will remember.

    Autumn is a poignant time in haiku poetry, and one for reflection. I feel that one or both of the ex-partners isn’t into the friendliest of reflections.

    Very sad and yet humorous.

    Alan

  2. Gregory Longenecker Says:

    Things are definitely on the waning side. It reminds me of ex- spouses in my family and the constant wilt of an old relationship over time. Nicely done, Joan!

  3. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    This is one of those ones that manages to capture humour and sadness at once. Very nice.

    marion

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