thunderclap—
the past tense he uses
to describe me


7 Responses

  1. Jim Delay Says:

    Margaret. Very nice, very strong, very smart. Thank you.— Jim Delay

  2. Paul Heinowski Says:

    so many storms
    but this
    is our last one

  3. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Oooh – nasty, nasty! I like this one a lot :)

    marion

  4. Sandra Says:

    Very inspirational, thanks :)

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    Ouch!

    So for once he gets his grammar correct, with the worse result.

    Neat haiku!

    warm regards,

    Alan

  6. haikuapprentice Says:

    Powerful haiku, Margaret. I am particularly struck by the poignancy in your choice of "uses" – a continuing present tense form – deliberately declining yourself to employ the past tense.
    Very moving work, and very raw.

    Thank you for sharing it.

    Strider

  7. janet Says:

    From "thunderclap" to the last word, yes, ouch!
    Skillfully written: "the past tense he uses"

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