anniversary day –
snail tracks crisscrossing
the sidewalk

 


6 Responses

  1. imogen288 Says:

    We tread politely,
    careful not to crush a snail
    exploring damp stone.

  2. Marie Shimane Says:

    snail in a leaf
    double wrapped
    against October's chill

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    anniversary day –
    snail tracks crisscrossing
    the sidewalk

    —HAROLD BOWES

    Snails are soooooooo haiku! :-)

    The Present Continuous is a potent device in the right hands, fortunately you have the right hands. Excellent use of juxtaposition, and allowing the reader to make their own decisions as a reader.

    Fine work!

    pull of stars turning cold the snail's navigation

    Alan Summers
    Publications credits (one line haiku):
    Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012); Blithe Spirit (February 2013)

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  4. Gisele LeBlanc Says:

    Lovely, and leaves lots of room for reflection!

    coastal map
    the sand etched
    by snails

    G.R. LeBlanc
    Notes from the Gean, June 2011

  5. dawndream1 Says:

    I love this! Beautiful & funny(to me). Thx!

  6. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    I love snail poems!

    Yours is suitably open to allow readers to complete it with their own experiences.

    wet start
    even the snail
    stays indoors

    Issa's Untidy Hut – Wednesday Haiku, January 16, 2013

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