Waiting at a riverbank for the cover of darkness, perhaps to see what might cross or to be the one who will attempt to cross, hints for me at life on the edge. War, famine, violence, poverty. There is something to escape and perhaps something to prevent from escaping within the tension of Jeremy Pendrey’s powerful tiny poem.
Ah, just the one word 'riverbank' conjures up so much atmosphere. A lovely phrase, and good to see a haiku that isn't just about one short moment but endless ones. :-)
*
the light off frost
as the river of heaven fades
into fishermen
November 18th, 2014 at 7:45 am
Waiting at a riverbank for the cover of darkness, perhaps to see what might cross or to be the one who will attempt to cross, hints for me at life on the edge. War, famine, violence, poverty. There is something to escape and perhaps something to prevent from escaping within the tension of Jeremy Pendrey’s powerful tiny poem.
November 18th, 2014 at 3:48 pm
This is one of those that you can read over and over again and get totally lost in. Very nice. :)
November 18th, 2014 at 3:50 pm
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riverbank
the long wait
for darkness
—JEREMY PENDREY
Ah, just the one word 'riverbank' conjures up so much atmosphere. A lovely phrase, and good to see a haiku that isn't just about one short moment but endless ones. :-)
*
the light off frost
as the river of heaven fades
into fishermen
Alan Summers
Mainichi Shimbun (Japan, 2011)
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November 20th, 2014 at 1:20 am
I thought of a salmon poacher. Yes, there is a lot of tension in that long wait. A great ku.
marion