midnight jetty
the sound of water
slapping water

 

 

(Originally published in A Hundred Gourds 1:3 – June 2012)


15 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

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    I haven't been around jettys at midnight only a dock/harbour on New Year's Eve. :-)

    Pero’s Bridge –
    the dock’s ice gathers
    new year resolutions

    Alan Summers
    Publications credits: City: Bristol Today in Poems and Pictures (Paralalia 2004)
    ISBN 10: 0954811704 ISBN 13: 9780954811709; 3Lights Gallery
    PROMENADE A 3LIGHTS Gallery Presentation Curator & Photographer LIAM WILKINSON 2008 3Lights Promenade (April – July 2008)

    I’ve only written a single jetty haiku, with a touch of humor:

    passing marshfields –
    through a dirty train window
    a jetty of yachts

    Alan Summers
    Blithe Spirit vol. 7 no. 4 (1997)

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    And a few harbour and dock ones…

    dockside dredger
    undulating reflections
    between night showers

    Alan Summers
    Presence 2 (1996)

    floating harbour
    a sunfall’s last glints over
    wind dimpled water

    Alan Summers
    City: Bristol Today in Poems and Pictures (Paralalia 2004)
    ISBN 10: 0954811704 ISBN 13: 9780954811709

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  2. kalaramesh Says:

    dockside dredger
    undulating reflections
    between night showers

    Alan Summers

    I love this, Alan
    I'm happy mine prompted you to dig out yours <s>
    Thanks a ton

  3. Sheila Sondik Says:

    "Sound in haiku" was the theme of the recent Haiku Northwest retreat in Seabeck, Washington. So I particularly appreciate this vivid haiku, Kala.

  4. Marie Shimane Says:

    Nice! I can see it, hear it, and feel it.

  5. kalaramesh Says:

    Thanks Marie,
    Wow! _/\_

  6. Barbara Kaufmann Says:

    I can hear this precise sound through your words, although the moment is a long ago memory. Thank you !

  7. kalaramesh Says:

    Beautiful compliment, Barbara
    Thanks a ton :))

  8. imogen288 Says:

    Deptford Creek
    the slap of dark water
    as the tide turns.

  9. kalaramesh Says:

    Thanks Imogen
    Nice response :)

  10. Gisele LeBlanc Says:

    My senses come alive! Beautifully crafted, Kala! :)

  11. kalaramesh Says:

    Ha! Gisele,
    Thank you so much :))
    This is one of my favourites.
    I remember, I did work for a long time to get this right :)

  12. Marion Clarke Says:

    'Slap' is exactly the verb that is needed to describe the sound of water hitting water at a jetty. Great sound and vision used to create atmosphere in this one, Kala.

    marion

  13. kalaramesh Says:

    Marion,

    Thank you so much for your appreciation.
    All art heavily depends on this 'pat' on the back.
    _kala :))

  14. kalaramesh Says:

    Thanks Sheila,

    Yes, I remember Susan Constable saying she conducted it.
    Happy you could relate to this so effortlessly
    _kala :))

  15. chief276 Says:

    Full of energy. I love it.

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