dried to a slit
of clear sky
(included in A Dictionary of Haiku, AHA Books, 2013)
Issue 15.2 | 6 November 2015
two landscapes joined
by a pulling thread
dry riverbed – the rainy season fills the farmer's calendar
rain on the river the jesus star shifting
Publications credits: Janice M Bostok Haiku Prize 2012 Anthology Evening Breeze
Jane, I wasn't surprised to see this was your work. You have a way of nailing a moment. Another perfect haiku.
Beautiful haiku, Jane, that lets us view the world through your poetic eye and be transformed by it.
Great to see you here, Jane :)
I really like how the narrator's viewpoint shifts from the vastness of a canyon stream down to a tiny slit of water in the river bed, and the fact it is 'a slit of clear sky' opens this up again. Lovely.
Startling shifts of perspective. That slit of sky is wonderful. For a moment it almost reads as though the scene is being viewed through a gap in the rocks. The reality is just as arresting.
Was just came to knew about haiku and i like this one. Now i'm understanding how a haiku is formed.
Lovely – although I live in a different area, I can see this poem. Thank you.
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