A Long Drive

They have been bickering for as long as I can remember. Yet they cannot stay apart for even a day. Do they hate each other?

snow flurries
the car breaks down
at the fork

 

 

 

(originally published in Bottle Rockets #32)


22 Responses

  1. S Patel Says:

    Lovely haibun Shrikaanth… great impact in least words…..

  2. Maureen Sudlow Says:

    love the way the prose and the poetry encounter – bickering and snow flurries – beautiful

  3. Vidya Says:

    Unforgettable. It a work that stays long in the mind probably because of the minimum words.

  4. Yesha Shah Says:

    A nicely woven piece with a fine haiku!

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Highly effective, Shrikaanth.

    marion

  6. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    Saf, Maureen, Vidya, Yesha, Marion- thanks for your appreciation and insightful comments. Much obliged!

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    I think you have managed to create a great little piece of micro fiction with this, Shrikaanth – now I would like to know what happens next! :)

    marion

  8. lane Says:

    Is this what they call love…

  9. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    I guess Jane. Hope so anyway :) Thanks for dropping by

  10. kalaramesh Says:

    Congratulations, Shrikaanth!
    Very nicely done with an effective haiku.

  11. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    Thanks Kala- appreciate your kind words

  12. Sanjuktaa Says:

    An excellent one with a lovely shift! Well-done, Shrikaanth!

  13. Shrikaanth krishnamurthy Says:

    Thanks Sanjuktaa- glad you saw good in it

  14. janewilliams Says:

    fifty years
    of fights
    between them
    each one
    smaller
    than the last

  15. hammerandtongs Says:

    Absolutely lovely. The story of a well-lived life.

  16. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    That is a lovely poem Janewilliams- a Sedoka maybe?

  17. janewilliams Says:

    Thank you Shrikaanth, your poem was inspiring. I wasn't aware of Sedoka, now I am :)

  18. Sandra Martyres Says:

    A super haibun…says so much in so few words! The ku at the end is perfect for the situation! Bravo Shrikaanth!

  19. Annette Yuki Makino Says:

    So nicely done. The question, left open for the reader, is beautifully echoed by the fork in the road.

  20. haikuapprentice Says:

    Bravo Shrikaanth – a wonderful exposition of human relationships paired with a poignant yet hopeful haiku. I really enjoyed this.

    Strider.

  21. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy Says:

    Annette, Marion, Strider- thanks for taking the time to express your appreciation, I am grinning widely here.

  22. hammerandtongs Says:

    Forked poem!!
    They bicker, but can't stay apart. Love or hate?
    Car breaks down at a fork in the road. Which way to go?
    Even the snow is undecided! Just flurries.

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