A Long Drive
They have been bickering for as long as I can remember. Yet they cannot stay apart for even a day. Do they hate each other?
snow flurries the car breaks down at the fork
(originally published in Bottle Rockets #32)
—Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Issue 15.2 | 8 January 2016
Lovely haibun Shrikaanth… great impact in least words…..
love the way the prose and the poetry encounter – bickering and snow flurries – beautiful
Unforgettable. It a work that stays long in the mind probably because of the minimum words.
A nicely woven piece with a fine haiku!
Highly effective, Shrikaanth.
marion
Saf, Maureen, Vidya, Yesha, Marion- thanks for your appreciation and insightful comments. Much obliged!
I think you have managed to create a great little piece of micro fiction with this, Shrikaanth – now I would like to know what happens next! :)
Is this what they call love…
I guess Jane. Hope so anyway :) Thanks for dropping by
Congratulations, Shrikaanth! Very nicely done with an effective haiku.
Thanks Kala- appreciate your kind words
An excellent one with a lovely shift! Well-done, Shrikaanth!
Thanks Sanjuktaa- glad you saw good in it
fifty years of fights between them each one smaller than the last
Absolutely lovely. The story of a well-lived life.
That is a lovely poem Janewilliams- a Sedoka maybe?
Thank you Shrikaanth, your poem was inspiring. I wasn't aware of Sedoka, now I am :)
A super haibun…says so much in so few words! The ku at the end is perfect for the situation! Bravo Shrikaanth!
So nicely done. The question, left open for the reader, is beautifully echoed by the fork in the road.
Bravo Shrikaanth – a wonderful exposition of human relationships paired with a poignant yet hopeful haiku. I really enjoyed this.
Strider.
Annette, Marion, Strider- thanks for taking the time to express your appreciation, I am grinning widely here.
Forked poem!! They bicker, but can't stay apart. Love or hate? Car breaks down at a fork in the road. Which way to go? Even the snow is undecided! Just flurries.
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January 8th, 2016 at 1:28 pm
Lovely haibun Shrikaanth… great impact in least words…..
January 8th, 2016 at 2:26 pm
love the way the prose and the poetry encounter – bickering and snow flurries – beautiful
January 9th, 2016 at 2:42 am
Unforgettable. It a work that stays long in the mind probably because of the minimum words.
January 9th, 2016 at 5:47 am
A nicely woven piece with a fine haiku!
January 9th, 2016 at 8:44 am
Highly effective, Shrikaanth.
marion
January 9th, 2016 at 10:48 am
Saf, Maureen, Vidya, Yesha, Marion- thanks for your appreciation and insightful comments. Much obliged!
January 15th, 2016 at 3:13 pm
I think you have managed to create a great little piece of micro fiction with this, Shrikaanth – now I would like to know what happens next! :)
marion
January 9th, 2016 at 5:18 pm
Is this what they call love…
January 9th, 2016 at 5:29 pm
I guess Jane. Hope so anyway :) Thanks for dropping by
January 9th, 2016 at 5:58 pm
Congratulations, Shrikaanth!
Very nicely done with an effective haiku.
January 9th, 2016 at 6:06 pm
Thanks Kala- appreciate your kind words
January 10th, 2016 at 3:29 am
An excellent one with a lovely shift! Well-done, Shrikaanth!
January 10th, 2016 at 3:39 am
Thanks Sanjuktaa- glad you saw good in it
January 10th, 2016 at 4:54 am
fifty years
of fights
between them
each one
smaller
than the last
May 27th, 2016 at 10:02 am
Absolutely lovely. The story of a well-lived life.
January 10th, 2016 at 5:58 pm
That is a lovely poem Janewilliams- a Sedoka maybe?
January 10th, 2016 at 8:50 pm
Thank you Shrikaanth, your poem was inspiring. I wasn't aware of Sedoka, now I am :)
January 10th, 2016 at 8:20 pm
A super haibun…says so much in so few words! The ku at the end is perfect for the situation! Bravo Shrikaanth!
January 15th, 2016 at 2:24 pm
So nicely done. The question, left open for the reader, is beautifully echoed by the fork in the road.
January 16th, 2016 at 12:31 am
Bravo Shrikaanth – a wonderful exposition of human relationships paired with a poignant yet hopeful haiku. I really enjoyed this.
Strider.
January 20th, 2016 at 12:38 am
Annette, Marion, Strider- thanks for taking the time to express your appreciation, I am grinning widely here.
May 27th, 2016 at 10:06 am
Forked poem!!
They bicker, but can't stay apart. Love or hate?
Car breaks down at a fork in the road. Which way to go?
Even the snow is undecided! Just flurries.