A Long Drive
They have been bickering for as long as I can remember. Yet they cannot stay apart for even a day. Do they hate each other?
the car breaks down
at the fork
(originally published in Bottle Rockets #32)
Issue 15.2 | 8 January 2016
Lovely haibun Shrikaanth… great impact in least words…..
love the way the prose and the poetry encounter – bickering and snow flurries – beautiful
Unforgettable. It a work that stays long in the mind probably because of the minimum words.
A nicely woven piece with a fine haiku!
Highly effective, Shrikaanth.
Saf, Maureen, Vidya, Yesha, Marion- thanks for your appreciation and insightful comments. Much obliged!
I think you have managed to create a great little piece of micro fiction with this, Shrikaanth – now I would like to know what happens next! :)
Is this what they call love…
I guess Jane. Hope so anyway :) Thanks for dropping by
Very nicely done with an effective haiku.
Thanks Kala- appreciate your kind words
An excellent one with a lovely shift! Well-done, Shrikaanth!
Thanks Sanjuktaa- glad you saw good in it
than the last
Absolutely lovely. The story of a well-lived life.
That is a lovely poem Janewilliams- a Sedoka maybe?
Thank you Shrikaanth, your poem was inspiring. I wasn't aware of Sedoka, now I am :)
A super haibun…says so much in so few words! The ku at the end is perfect for the situation! Bravo Shrikaanth!
So nicely done. The question, left open for the reader, is beautifully echoed by the fork in the road.
Bravo Shrikaanth – a wonderful exposition of human relationships paired with a poignant yet hopeful haiku. I really enjoyed this.
Annette, Marion, Strider- thanks for taking the time to express your appreciation, I am grinning widely here.
They bicker, but can't stay apart. Love or hate?
Car breaks down at a fork in the road. Which way to go?
Even the snow is undecided! Just flurries.
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