silently
across hard piano keys
a soft duster

the spring breeze feels its way
through old wind chimes

 

 

 

This is a tan renga, a form of linked verse, by Anna Maris and Marcus Liljedahl.


8 Responses

  1. Emily Rademacher Says:

    Lovely images. Thank you for your word gifts.

  2. Bethany Says:

    This is gorgeous.

  3. pdfrench Says:

    Lovely, really enjoyed it!

  4. MaryJo Says:

    Beautiful. I'm hearing the tones of the piano as my mother used the duster, and the chimes ringing in harmony. Thank you.

  5. haikuapprentice Says:

    Wow, what a stunning effect!

    I love the rich contrasts, which are both explicit and implied, and which embrace multiple senses, greatly enhancing the effect of this poem –

    "hard" piano keys, "soft" duster
    I see black and white on the keyboard
    I hear allegro and adagio

    There is silence now, but I cannot help but imagine the range of dynamics when the keyboard is at play

    Finally, there is the delightful image of the spring breeze, "feeling its way" through the chimes. This is delightfully auditory, but I particularly love how the phrase "feeling its way" is an echo of how musicians frequently create their work.

    A masterful composition by Anna and Marcus! Bravo!
    I hope to enjoy more such collaborations in future.

    Strider

  6. marykendall Says:

    What beautiful images.

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    A delightful collaboration!

    marion

  8. hammerandtongs Says:

    Lovely. The contrast between the spring breeze (new) and the old (wind chimes). The hard piano keys and the soft duster.

    "The spring breeze feels its way", because it is a spring breeze, a zephyr, not a windstorm. Also read into it the gentleness of the breeze, because it is is careful of the OLD wind chimes.

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