spinning
a carousel
of postcards
I see my town
as a tourist

 

 

 

(originally appeared in bottle rockets, #32, Feb 2015)


11 Responses

  1. pdfrench Says:

    Excellent!!

  2. lamartcooper Says:

    I like the imagery contained in the verse and the fresh perspective one can gain by looking at your everyday environment from a new perspective.

    Well done!

  3. marykendall Says:

    Seeing with "beginners mind" or fresh eyes…how a wonderful idea and image in this lovely poem.

  4. MaryJo Says:

    What fun this haiku is. Imagine spinning to find a postcard and there's your town. Thanks, Mary.

  5. Valentina Says:

    I like it.

  6. Alison Hedlund Says:

    Well done! I readily identify with the feeling. I like the inclusion of the carousel image as well, as it reflects in a sidewise way our town's festival experience (the Dentzel carousel put up each year at the Wooden Boat Festival).

  7. madhurip Says:

    Lovely tanka!

  8. Sally Biggar Says:

    Thank you for your comments, everyone!

  9. haikuapprentice Says:

    Wonderful poetry Sally. And I really love how the form of the verse actually embodies the content and the experience being conveyed – each of the five lines can be read almost as a rack of the carousel, with their own pictures and partial portrayal of the town. Brilliant stuff!

    Strider

  10. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Your tanka really spoke to me, Sally. I live in a coastal town in Northern Ireland and whenever anyone sees a photo or painting from here they often gasp at the scenery. I took it for granted until I moved back after living elsewhere for almost two decades and only saw it through the eyes of others on my return.

    An effective poem.

    marion

  11. hammerandtongs Says:

    What a true thought. Oftentimes we have to "see ourself as others see us", to re-accquaint ourselves with that which has become familiar–
    "I see my town
    as a tourist"

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