lightning then thunder
the steel strings of the guitar
hum


4 Responses

  1. harrisfr Says:

    Nice

  2. haikuapprentice Says:

    Well observed Mike! You've captured that sudden silence (and heightened sense of hearing) which comes after a sudden thunderclap. And I really like how you use the structure of your haiku to aesthetic effect – the verse begins traditionally with 5 – 7 syllables, then the final line is a single word, but that word is onomatopoeic, and resonates long afterward, like the guitar strings themselves. Great stuff! Thank you for sharing this.

    Strider

  3. Mike Andrelczyk Says:

    Thanks!

  4. Tash Adams Says:

    Wow! This is awesome. An effective juxtaposition and well described. Every word is just the right word & no extra or too few words. Precise & perfect :)

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