old pond
   oil slick rainbows
      slip in

 


14 Responses

  1. Marta Chocilowska Says:

    Love this poem!

  2. Perry Says:

    Very nice. I like the implication that the oil slick rainbows don't belong.

  3. MaryJo Says:

    I like what Perry said. And thinking of old people, how they've lived so long, done well, and then the oil slicks that look pretty but are deadly slip in.

  4. Marilyn Hazelton Says:

    Amazing tribute to Basho and call for an awakening. Lovely!

  5. Jane Says:

    A gentle reminder of what can slip in when we're not paying attention to our life or the lives of others, when we're neglectful. Love it Lorin.

  6. Garry Says:

    The allusion to Basho's 'old pond' was probably intended also to echo a common diminutive for the Atlantic Ocean, 'the pond,' both potential sinks, one metaphorical, one real, for petroleum pollution. The planetary breadth of this setting is matched in breadth by the allusion to the story of the Biblical flood and Jehovah's promise (here treated ironically) contained in the rainbow. The promise of a better world delivered by the petro industry, here echoed in the oil slick rainbow, has been inverted by its destructive influence on the world's environment, often coming in the form of torrential, long lasting rains and flooding.
    Or something like that.
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    Good poem, Lorin!
    .
    .
    trees topped
    with cooing doves float by
    in summer rain

  7. magyar Says:

    That, that we must never poison; Lorin you've said it so well. _m

    still pond
    as frogs count the stars
    a far owl

  8. kalaramesh Says:

    Very well done, Lorin — the old and the new brought in most beautifully.

  9. chief276 Says:

    Will the old pond survive? Powerful juxtaposition of art and nature, past and present. Well done, lorin.

  10. Jade Pisani Says:

    old pond
    oil slick rainbows
    slip in

    Thanks for sharing this haiku. The images here are unforgettable.
    Like what Kalaramesh mentioned, the old and the new have been put into a scene which is sad and colourful at the same time.

  11. Maya Says:

    love the contrast to Basho's pond

  12. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    A great haiku, Lorin. The oil slick combined with pond made me think of 'across the pond' and spillage from a ship on the Atlantic. I love 'oil slick rainbows.'

    marion

  13. @padma_thampatty Says:

    Lovely

  14. @padma_thampatty Says:

    Lovely!!

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