falling behind
the serious hikers
wild raspberries


17 Responses

  1. MaryJo Says:

    Love the playfulness of this haiku. Know where I'd be…

  2. Julie Warther Says:

    Very fun, Jill! Yes, I've often been sidetracked with berry picking. This haiku has me looking forward to summer. Thanks!

  3. Lauren Says:

    I would be right there as well! Lovely haiku.

  4. Annette Makino Says:

    A hiker after my own heart. Love the gently humor in this one.

  5. Barbara Kaufmann Says:

    Thank you for the smiles. I love this one!

  6. Norah Says:

    Delicious.

  7. Allison Millcock Says:

    This one made me smile in a couple different ways. Love the cheekiness of it along with the appreciation of nature.

  8. madhurip Says:

    Love it.

  9. gatheringwonder Says:

    wonderful!

  10. janewilliams Says:

    all day hike
    the cloud covered sun
    lost in time

  11. Alison H. Says:

    A delight!

  12. haikuapprentice Says:

    Welcome Jill and a lovely debut haiku here on Tinywords!

    I really enjoy the sense of breathlessness that comes from the break between the first and second line, especially when reading this verse out loud. It really brought the experience of bushwalking back to me.

    Looking forward to more of your works in future.

    Strider

  13. Jim Ellis Says:

    "Serious hikers" – what a great clause
    This is a wonderful poem on multiple layers
    – Jim Ellis

  14. Jill Lange Says:

    Thanks All for your comments. Feels so fine sharing a moment with others who really “get it.”

  15. agnesevasavich Says:

    Love this! I always brake for berries on the trail :)

  16. marykendall Says:

    Another hiker bites the dust…or rather, raspberries. Love this one, Jill.

  17. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    There is a hint of naughtiness in this that I adore! :)

    marion

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