all day rain
clicking my pen again
and again

 


9 Responses

  1. Garry Says:

    all day rain
    my plugged-up fountain
    runneth over
    .
    :-)

  2. Helen Buckingham Says:

    winter chill
    up half the night
    with a leaking pen

    (The Mainichi Daily News, 21st March 2012)

  3. Jan Dobb Says:

    I find the prolonged and integrated sounds of rain and pen so audible, so apt. Yet there is contrast, too, between the steadiness of rain and the frustration suggested by repeated pen-clicking. Such possibilities of interpretation! Thank you.

  4. Bruce Feingold Says:

    The haiku wonderfully generates a pent up feeling for me – impatience, anxiety, maybe obsessiveness. I admire the haiku craft in the repetitive use of the words rain/again to stimulate our experience and like Jan said the contrast between rain (nature) and human nature works well.
    Nicely done!

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    all day rain
    clicking my pen again
    and again

    —BRAD BENNETT

    Ah, yes, so many of us click our pens for various reasons, and sometimes third parties become involved…
    .

    all my mistakes
    each click of the pen
    the robin moves

    Alan Summers

    Publications credits:
    Earlier version Presence #24 (2004)
    earlier version ; "D'un ciel a l'autre" Anthologie de haiku de l'Union Europeenne, (Edition de l'Association francaise de haiku 2006)
    Seven By Twenty twitter-length fiction and poetry (March 2011)
    Charlotte Digregorio's Writer's Blog Daily Haiku, July 13, 2015

    The (European) robin is very much a Christmas seasonal reference in Britain and Ireland and a Winter reference in general, not just poetic, as it's mostly the robin that sings through Winter while others become silent.
    .

  6. obat maag Says:

    all day rain The haiku wonderfully generates a pent up feeling for me

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Great use of sound!

    marion

  8. hammerandtongs Says:

    It's raining outside and the writer's mind runneth dry? Just "clicking my pen again
    and again".

    Lovely sound.

  9. jelly gamat sirup Says:

    all day rain
    my plugged-up fountain
    runneth over

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