a few words
from the doctor
crows on snow


5 Responses

  1. janewilliams Says:

    The weight of the 'few words', the starkness, what crows portend … so much here, love this haiku.

    a small smile
    the chemo nurse
    tries again

  2. hammerandtongs Says:

    that sad smile
    Says it all.
    darkness gathering

  3. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Interestingly, I saw a doctor's handwriting when I read this. A prescription, perhaps. It must have been the crows against the snow that made me think of words written on paper rather than spoken. It is said that rhyme should be avoided in haiku, but I think 'crows' and 'snow' works here as the voice automatically drops when reading the last line aloud, suggesting the news is not good.

    marion

  4. agnesevasavich Says:

    hahahah! I'm reading this as the typical doctor's "chicken scratch" handwriting too as the unspoken connection.

    But there's a somber note underlying it too – crows as a harbinger / simple spoken words of maybe a hopeless situation.

    It's a bit like a lenticular picture: one view light and humorous / one view somber and chilling

  5. @padma_thampatty Says:

    Evocative!

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