breaking into
an abandoned house
January wind


8 Responses

  1. MaryJo Says:

    Made me smile.
    I read the first two lines and wondered who did it–how will it be a haiku and I
    enjoyed the surprise of January wind.

  2. Gaby Bedetti Says:

    I love the third line surprise, too.

  3. janewilliams Says:

    Gorgeous! I especially like the choice of January, perhaps being a new year wind it carries with it some hope for the abandoned house …

    demolition site
    everywhere slivers
    of winter sun

  4. Magyar Says:

    ___ Or, from a different point of imagination, the homeless find shelter to that winter winded sleet and cold. _m

    Homeless huddle; in this deserted house; broken glass.

  5. Michelle Schaefer Says:

    There is something beautifully accosting about this poem that leaves you cold. Very well done.

  6. aniketnik Says:

    There is a difference between what's part of history, followed by what happened in past, then followed by memories from past and further followed by the fact that "an establishment" connects and links to all.

    With times things change. Old things now have to make a way for new things to come up.

    "January" represents time, first month of the year, which is absolutely interesting because it can be any day of the month.

    "Abandoned house" can also represent an establishment that has now become old with time.

    Winds represent the fact that change is going to take place for sure.

    Winds of change brought in sunshine and rain
    Life will definitely proceed and progress.

  7. Alan Summers Says:

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    breaking into
    an abandoned house
    January wind

    —ROBERT NACZAS

    Wonderful! A fine haiku with undertones of senryu.

    It certainly resonates even after multiple readings. The use of enjambment, breaking/ending the first the line with 'into' really works, building the tension up.

    Fine work!

    warm regards,

    Alan
    President, United Haiku and Tanka Society

  8. Marion Clarke Says:

    January – what a thug! 😄

    Nicely done.

    marion

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