after the protest
moonlight on empty
tear-gas canisters

 


13 Responses

  1. Ken Olson Says:

    a moment of peace . . . reflected in the tools of chaos and violence. well done!!

  2. Janice Says:

    Beautiful, says so much. Thanks.

  3. David Oates Says:

    Thank you.

  4. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    I'm reminded of the brilliant anthology entitled
    "A Long Rainy Season: Haiku and Tanka"
    (Rock Spring Collection of Japanese Literature)
    by Leza Lowitz (Editor), Miyuki Aoyama (Editor), Akemi Tomioka (Editor), Robert Kushner (Illustrator) 1994.

    The women wrote about contemporary issues including women's rights and being gassed by the government and police of their country (Japan).

    Freedom of speech is under risk again with the recent terror attacks, including one on my own country. We forget that our Western governments often inflame situations so much that extremism occurs both at home and abroad from more than just one religion alas.
    .
    after the protest
    moonlight on empty
    tear-gas canisters

    —DAVID OATES

    I thought your line break was especially intriguing, and powerful, where the second line has:

    "moonlight on empty" which raises the resonance of both line one:

    "after the protest"

    And third/last line:

    "tear-gas canisters"

    The haiku is subtly brilliant, and I hope this is anthologised by leading haiku anthologists such as Red Moon Press, and wins awards such as The Touchstone Award (The Haiku Foundation) etc…
    .
    Alan Summers
    President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
    co-founder, Call of the Page

  5. David Oates Says:

    Thank you , Alan, I appreciate your kind words!

  6. David Oates Says:

    I'll look for "A Long Rainy Season." I'm curious about something. I've been reading about deliberate practice ("Grit" by Angela Duckworth), and I have started asking serious writers of haiku and related forms what their work patterns are. Would you be willing to share yours?

  7. Alan Summers Says:

    Hi David,

    I could put something together. I guess it's so instinctive over the decades, it might need some thought now, to put into words other than as poems.

    My email address: admin[at]callofthepage[dot]org
    That's just "org" at the end.

    warm regards,
    Alan

  8. David Oates Says:

    Thank you. Mine is dvdoates[at]aol[dot]com. Is AOL "retro" yet? :>

  9. Alan Summers Says:

    I thought AOL was retro way back in the mid-1990s. ;-) Kind of 'steam punk' technology.

    Many thanks for your email. :-)

    Alan

  10. David Oates Says:

    Thank you, all. I appreciate the insights and reading suggestions. Very happy to have this on “tiny words.”

    David O

  11. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    There is a harsh beauty in this.

    marion

  12. aniketnikhade Says:

    I like the use of time and space that's made. It's extremely effective.

    Like for instance the first line says "after the protest", which means a lot of time has passed since the protest was going on. As of now the protest is over. So it's a change from what things were to what things are and of course reflects on how things will be in future. Thus both elements are in use "Time and space".

    "moonlight on empty", which means it's not that the people have gone away. They are still there on the protest site, however, the day is over. Night is in progress and it continues.

    "tear-gas canisters" reflects more of a symbol that it was used during protest to make sure things don't get out of control. As far as negotiation and crowd is concerned it does not come into picture.

  13. David Oates Says:

    Thank you. I appreciate the thought you put into articulating this! Best, David Oates

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