At first I read green field flooded the train–Wow. Back up. Really like the way you juxtaposed the flooded green fields and that train that didn't stop.
Wonderful, love train haiku! I like the play on words, and of course during the great floods in Britain it was almost as if trains would be flooded.
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sun flickering corn stubble a train pulls a little sky
Alan Summers
Anthology credit: International Multilingual Poetry Anthology Amaravati Poetic Prism 2016
June 21st, 2017 at 11:13 am
At first I read green field flooded the train–Wow. Back up. Really like the way you juxtaposed the flooded green fields and that train that didn't stop.
Cheers, Danny.
June 21st, 2017 at 9:54 pm
I really liked this!
June 23rd, 2017 at 1:15 pm
Wonderful, love train haiku! I like the play on words, and of course during the great floods in Britain it was almost as if trains would be flooded.
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sun flickering corn stubble a train pulls a little sky
Alan Summers
Anthology credit: International Multilingual Poetry Anthology Amaravati Poetic Prism 2016