green fields flooded the train passing a station without stopping

 


4 Responses

  1. MaryJo Says:

    At first I read green field flooded the train–Wow. Back up. Really like the way you juxtaposed the flooded green fields and that train that didn't stop.

    Cheers, Danny.

  2. Peggy French Says:

    I really liked this!

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    Wonderful, love train haiku! I like the play on words, and of course during the great floods in Britain it was almost as if trains would be flooded.
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    sun flickering corn stubble a train pulls a little sky

    Alan Summers
    Anthology credit: International Multilingual Poetry Anthology Amaravati Poetic Prism 2016

  4. aniketnikhade Says:

    An interesting moment
    An intense feeling

    The only thing comes to my mind is the fact that expressions change when an individual gets this feel and faces such an intense moment.

    So close to the green fields yet the mind changes it's thought process with regards to what was going on in mind prior. It's an absolutely refreshing change.

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