frantic ants
still building
the unlit fire

 

 


4 Responses

  1. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    Great, the sense of ant movement being like flame tells us something unexpected.

  2. Jan Benson Says:

    Well done.
    Those fire ants do set flames when they land on human toes!

    Jan in Texas

  3. magyar Says:

    Nifty one John!
    __ Your… "the unlit fire," has "lit" readers' imaginations, that, is the inner value of haiku / senryu. _m

  4. aniketnikhade Says:

    The best thing is the fact that cause must get the topmost priority. Hence "frantic" seems to define the mood of the ant's movement while in present. As far as unlit fire is concerned, it makes a way for the cause to be bought into focus again. Interesting.

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