her plastic pail
waiting by the bed
sand-dollar moon


6 Responses

  1. Helen Buckingham Says:

    Wow – this is brilliant.

  2. Greg Says:

    Nice image and sense of anticipiation.

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    her plastic pail
    waiting by the bed
    sand-dollar moon

    —DIAN DUCHIN REED

    Romantic and poignant. Is this a young girl, maybe on holiday, waiting to rush to the beach? Is this a girl with great memories of a recent Summer holiday?

    Is this a woman still waiting for something but not necessarily, after many years, a run to the beach, but something else, a relationship that won't fail, or that she is actually many many decades older, always looking back. Someone that has never given up the call of childhood, a Peter Pan in spirit?

    The more the crafted poem is read, the more, we as readers, as a hidden second verse, in fact, can feel. One to enjoy many times.

    Beautifully composed with more than one hidden depth.

    warm regards,
    Alan
    President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
    co-founder, Call of the Page

  4. Dian Duchin Reed Says:

    Thank you all for your wonderful comments. Yes, Alan, "hidden depth" is what I love best about haiku. So much more there than meets the eye. Not unlike life.

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    I am always fascinated by the hidden depth(s) we either plan to include in our poems, or the ones we hadn't realised, too. :-)

  6. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Oh! I saw this as a child who was ill in bed, remembering days spent on the shore … :(

    marion

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