Muscle Beach
the effortless lift
of terns

 

 


9 Responses

  1. Michelle Schaefer Says:

    The great thing about this poem is that you don’t have to be from Venice to appreciate the humor of the haiku. The nonchalance of birds paying no attention to the flexing and the bulging going on around them. They just do what birds do naturally. Cheers

  2. williamgottlieb Says:

    Thank you, Michelle! I have a haibun "about" Venice in the next issue of Modern Haiku…this haiku was originally part of that haibun, but didn't work for the editor. It also benefited from the wise editing of the folks at tinywords who wisely advised a cut of two extraneous words…

  3. Dawn Apanius Says:

    Wonderful images.

  4. williamgottlieb Says:

    Thank you, Dawn! Warmly, Bill

  5. Magyar Says:

    Nicely sensed, Bill, and I thank you for… this generated echo_!
    __ On the Cape Cod coast: We watch the gulls glide and search for a spot to safely beach themselves, beyond (as they see us) that annoying crowd of strange creatures. Smiles_m.

    wings set
    gulls flag the onshore winds
    scanners

  6. williamgottlieb Says:

    Thank you, Magyar! Enjoyed your response…

  7. jean Says:

    it is really that much simple ?

  8. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Ha! I like the humour in this one. :)

    marion

  9. Alan Summers Says:

    Muscle Beach
    the effortless lift
    of terns

    —BILL GOTTLIEB

    Ah, birds doing the impossible with no effort, and earth dwellers all shiny and sweating. :-)

    .

    skuas in from smog
    pause in their reflection
    the tide washed beach

    Huntingdon Beach, Los Angeles (California, USA)

    Alan Summers
    Publication credits: Haiku Spirit (1996)

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