with each deep breath
I find more of myself
in this world
the scent of rose petals
after the rain

 

 


12 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    with each deep breath
    I find more of myself
    in this world
    the scent of rose petals
    after the rain

    —CHRISTINA SNG
    .
    .
    Wonderful! That scent after rain, love it!
    .
    .

    I'm changing
    for the last time
    just like the heron
    shifting from river bank
    to river bank

    Alan Summers
    The Right Touch of Sun
    Tanka Society of America
    Members's Anthology 2017
    ed. Margaret Dornaus & David Terelinck

  2. janewilliams Says:

    Lovely meditative tanka

    crushed lavender
    more of my grandmother
    in each breath

  3. Magyar Says:

    As I have read, a fine tanka Christina; as inspired, my humble uncertified parallel. _m

    tree branch
    searching buds touch the stars
    in this darkness
    the owls' harmony
    calls new leaves

  4. Pravat Says:

    Elegant tanka, Christina. Beautifully harmonised with L3 as pivot line ((kakekatoba) and with gentle expression (koto shikarubeki).

    close to the lips
    over a cup of coffee
    winter rain
    gently pours warmth
    of long memories

    Pravat Kumar Padhy

    Publication Credit: Tanka Poets on Site

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Ahhhh beautiful!

    marion

  6. Mike Schoenburg Says:

    CNG,

    Would work better as two haiku:

    the scent

    of rose petals

    after the rain

    {Five-line haiku are very cumbersome

    & awkward!}

  7. Kathe L. Palka Says:

    Mike, it isn't a haiku. It is a tanka and a good one. http://www.tankasocietyofamerica.org/ Please visit the Tanka Society of America's website where you will find much information and many more fine examples of the form which is much older that haiku.

  8. Joy MacVane Says:

    This could be one of my all time favorites. It speaks deeply to me. Thank you.

  9. Kath Abela Wilson Says:

    Beautiful Christina. The moment so vivid and felt. Like experience that feels familiar and revisited. Tingling with feeling.

    One can imagine a litany of moments with the scents of different flowers in our life.

  10. Connie Gildersleeve Says:

    Very nicely written.

  11. MaryJo Says:

    Deeply touched by your tanka.

  12. Tigz De Palma Says:

    A deep reminder of how powerful our sense of smell can be in bringing us into the present. Scent is often overlooked in both poetry and life in this age. This tanka reminds me of the many moments that scent has made me feel more alive. Beautiful.

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