my thoughts
this way and that
wild rabbits

 

 


12 Responses

  1. kalaramesh Says:

    Absolutely lovely, Susan!
    Extremely well done.

  2. John Says:

    busy mind

  3. Pravat Says:

    A wonderful ku, Susan, with thoughtful juxtaposition (renso).

    spider web–
    my thought caught
    in between

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: Under the Basho, Inaugural Issue, Vol.1.1 Autumn 2013

  4. jennyangyal Says:

    Wonderful,Susan!

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    Very nice!
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    my thoughts
    this way and that
    wild rabbits

    —SUSAN CONSTABLE

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    Works wonderfully well, and beautifully and magically as one line:

    my thoughts this way and that wild rabbits
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    flickering lights
    the rabbit disappears
    down an Alice Hole
    and me? I’m all alone
    a right thing done wrong

    Alan Summers
    Blithe Spirit 26.2 (Summer 2016)

  6. Connie Says:

    Oh, I really like this.

  7. Susan Says:

    My appreciation to each of you for your encouraging comments. It's always gratifying to know that something we write actually works for others. Thank you so much!

  8. Bruce H Feingold Says:

    I really enjoyed the wonderful juxtaposition of the mind and nature, and it’s quickness of words matched the essence of our minds and rabbits. Both deep and humorous.

  9. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Love it, Susan – the jux is inspired! This gave me a smile.

    marion

  10. chief276 Says:

    Oh – yours too?

    night wind neither here nor there my thoughts

    Well done, Susan.

    Best, Bill Kenney

  11. Anitha Varma Says:

    Lovely….Thoughts flitting from one subject to another, like wild rabbits…Can see this so clearly..
    Anita.

  12. Susan Says:

    My apologies for not getting back to this sooner. I certainly appreciate all your comments and am delighted the juxtaposition works for everyone. Not tell WHERE those thoughts and rabbits will go next. <smile>
    Thanks again!

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