a lone teal
circles the mallards
first school day

 


7 Responses

  1. Ronald K. Craig Says:

    The small dabbling teal circles the beautiful mallards, the most common, familiar American duck. A very nice image and a great analogy! Thank you, Marietta.

  2. Magyar Says:

    Grand thought within the circles, Marietta_!
    __ Too, with each circle, the common teal may learn anew.

    as ducks do teach of life
    the hatchlings

  3. Pravat Says:

    A brilliant play of imageries with poetic juxtaposition.

    cut out of moon
    the child reconfirms
    looking up

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credit: The Notes from the Gean, Vol.3, Issue 4, March 2012 ( Haibun: Searching the Size)

  4. janewilliams Says:

    This denotes many 'first school day' feelings: excitement tempered with wariness, individual/potential loner versus being one of the mallards and fitting in … terrific analogy.

  5. Mike Schoenburg Says:

    Great school-day imagery!

    yellow dawn
    mallards sip
    the pond shadows

    mute swan
    circles the pond
    ripples abound ~~~

  6. EasyHouz Says:

    Charming!

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Inspired, Marietta! Another lovely piece of writing from you. :)

    marion

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