http://tinywords.com Responses to haiku published on tinywords. Fri, 09 May 2008 15:28:26 en-us The tinywords site is copyright (c) 2000-2006 by d. f. tweney. All haiku published on tinywords are copyright (c) by their respective authors. dft@tinywords.com dft@tinywords.com http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all 2008-05-09 15:28:26 Bill Kenney http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all#comment-22873 Cinematic, dramatic, but not in the least overstated. A Markowski gem. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all 2008-05-09 13:36:37 Helen Buckingham http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all#comment-22871 Ditto cinematic - but nonetheless 'real'. Great stuff. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-09 13:00:24 Helen Buckingham http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22870 Many thanks, everyone, for your responses. Great to see several of you taking away something positive from what, to my mind, is essentially a dark poem. Haiku is traditionally deemed to be a collaboration between author and reader - and as such all perspectives are invaluable. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all 2008-05-09 12:41:41 toby evans http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all#comment-22869 this is a perfect haiku in my opinion. cinematic & perfectly juxtaposed T http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all 2008-05-09 12:25:44 Penelope (rides on by) http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all#comment-22868 prairie sunset the glow of the cattleman's branding iron still warm the coffee now bitter cold descends stoking the fire beans and bacon morning comes too soon.... http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all 2008-05-09 12:11:44 terrytip http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5924&comments=all#comment-22867 bar-b-que chuckwagon steak sundown smoke http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-08 20:03:35 b. m. richardson http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22863 side of the road- seasonal white flowering weeds immersed in red clay http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-08 19:41:10 b. m. richardson http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22862 salty air through broken window-- fish on the bed http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all 2008-05-08 19:27:00 b. m. richardson http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all#comment-22861 rain ends bees come out as soon as it begins http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-08 12:40:17 Melissa Spurr http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22857 "Verge" seems the key word here. I feel a lot of eager anticipation in this; a lovely moment, lovelier still for its promise of more beauty yet to come. Wonderful. Thank you for this, Helen. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-08 07:11:30 Bill Kenney http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22856 It took my American ear a couple of beats to hear "verge" properly, but it was more than worth the effort. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-08 07:02:13 magyar http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22855 Helen... one can immagine these "wrapped flowers" as -buds- waiting to unwrap into a new day's light. Well done! _m http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all 2008-05-08 03:28:30 Alan Summers http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=6284&comments=all#comment-22854 This reminds me also of the one in Whiteladies Road which has had wrapped flowers for perhaps two years now? Nice to see you on Tinywords again! ;-) http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-07 18:20:49 Kat http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22851 Martin, I have read them all and each one twanged on the heart strings. Thank you so much. I smell it, I feel it. Kat http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-07 15:14:51 Helen Buckingham http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22849 Powerfully evocative. Congratulations. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-07 10:28:39 Mike http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22847 mmmm...this is equally redolent here on the TX coast (Gulf of Mexico). Thnx! http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-07 10:24:42 Andrea http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22845 I can smell it... A really great work. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all 2008-05-07 09:51:26 Alan Summers http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=4630&comments=all#comment-22844 Ah, just "night traffic" is atmospheric enough, but "seaweed" and "pier" help deliver a triple whammy of sound, smell, and mood. ;-) http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all 2008-05-06 18:18:10 Bill Kenney http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all#comment-22842 That second line is brilliant. http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all 2008-05-06 17:00:06 Alan Summers http://tinywords.com/haiku?ID=5142&comments=all#comment-22841 Nice touch of humour! ;-)