muddy lot
of the psychiatrist
winter drizzle

—Mark Brooks
        

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Responses to the haiku for 2 January 2001 by Mark Brooks

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-01 07:25:29
     

    in reading this piece, i expected something slightly different for the third line, rather than "winter drizzle".

    better yet, allow me the opportunity on beginning again.

    "muddy lot"
    i conceived muddle lot. upon saying this, i saw the light in mark's words, however, with it being winter, my thoughts were of a frozen tundra. i feel too much handling was given to the first line, in an effort to create a dual purpose.

    or even thinking more, possibly a re-arrangement of the lines would serve a better purpose.

    case in point:

    winter drizzle
    psychiatrist's encounters
    muddy(muddle) lot


    nice capturing mark, your seeing the (confused mental state, the confusion in thought or action); though "muddy" generates the thought of an abundance of mud, and your third line, initially said "drizzle rain", hardly enough to create the conditions in your first line.

    but, we could have "that which is soiled", if we trudged a little deeper

  2.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-02-05 02:13:18
     

    pampered
    the male patient's head
    in the woman dentist's bossom

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-05-02 08:17:16
     

    autumn, acorn fell
    predawn, fallen aged oak tree --
    fledgling doves roost


    -


    i-n-d-i-v-i-d-u-a-l-i-t-y
    conform ...
    life's idiosyncrasies
    (somewhat philosophical, ha)

    -

    worn blanket
    winter, both put away --
    birds sing

  4.  
    yee hop choi
    2005-10-05 15:05:30
     

    "muddy lot of the psychiatrist?" that
    sounds like broken english. couldn't this
    line have been phrased more smoothly. am
    glad you are not teaching english.
    yee


    psychiatrist's office
    i analyze the ink blots
    on his shirt pocket

  5.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-05-01 21:03:41
     

    doves in flight
    my hope for today--
    a flat tire

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