shoveling snow,
and singing a Don Ho song
under my breath


—J. D. Heskin
        

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Duluth, MN

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Responses to the haiku for 23 January 2002 by J. D. Heskin

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-12-02 06:04:49
     

    sand on my shoes
    the ac comes on...
    caroling from beyond the lawn

  2.  
    levon machenry
    2005-07-06 15:34:51
     

    jd,
    nice piece of work here, but i think it might
    read better this way...

    shoveling snow
    i sing a don ho song
    under my breath


    it might be even better if you used a song title
    as in this example...


    shoveling snow
    i whistle "dixie"
    under my breath

    just a few suggestions to improve an already fine
    haiku

  3.  
    b.m.r.
    2008-12-23 19:11:42
     

    leaf, end of season
    waivering accidental in the breeze
    just me

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