pinned to the desk
by a calculator
the monthly bills


—Patricia Prime
        

About the author: Patricia has recently retired from teaching after 30 years, and now devotes some time to the reading recovery programme at her local school. She is the co-editor of the New Zealand haiku magazine Kokako and reviews editor of the online magazine Stylus. She writes short stories, poetry, reviews and articles, and likes to write collaborative poems with other poets.

Contact Patricia: pprime at ihug.co.nz.

 

Responses to the haiku for 31 July 2002 by Patricia Prime

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-10-19 07:15:48
     

    stuck in a meeting
    staring at my legal pad ...
    seeing her name

    ---------------------------

    castle on a cliff
    precariously ~
    looking at, outside my world
    my soul sees beyond

  2.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-10-19 23:43:58
     

    Yours surpass mine. Mine doesn't make sense as it sounds as though I'm pinned to the desk by the calculator. Might be better written: monthly bills / pinned to the desk / by a calculator. Your second poem more like a tanka. Pat

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-10-20 07:34:58
     

    patricia, i was inspired by your words

    we are asked to reply as affected

    in yours, i was reminded of a song

    strangely, i know not the author nor the title, though we may cross paths, again

    thanks, for your being you


    just me

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