honeymoon over
in their suitcases
traces of confetti


—Patricia Prime
        

About the author: Patricia has recently retired from teaching after 30 years, and now devotes some time to the reading recovery programme at her local school. She is the co-editor of the New Zealand haiku magazine Kokako and reviews editor of the online magazine Stylus. She writes short stories, poetry, reviews and articles, and likes to write collaborative poems with other poets.

Contact Patricia: pprime at ihug.co.nz.

Responses to the haiku for 1 October 2002 by Patricia Prime

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-08 13:39:14
     

    dedicated to stan:

    suitcases by the door
    his clothes on the floor ...
    honeymoon is over

  2.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-11-08 17:21:50
     

    wedding finery
    his clothes on hers
    in the hotel suite

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-08 18:06:21
     

    winter afternoon, a sunday
    she leaves the bedroom
    he says, "by the way..."
    in her hand, she returns with a beer
    honeymoon over

  4.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-11-08 20:11:48
     

    new apartment
    she bruises her shins
    against his suitcase

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-09 02:01:01
     

    bruised feelings
    new words of affection ...
    love vacates the (premises)

  6.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-11-09 23:24:11
     

    new apartment
    from his little black book
    she rips several pages

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-10 01:59:45
     

    an autumn downpour ///
    through the door
    she hears his confession

  8.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-11-10 23:05:14
     

    telling herself
    not to look back at the past
    she prepares rump steak

  9.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-11 01:13:06
     

    late autumn meal for two
    neither plate is eaten from ...
    alone

  10.  
    Patricia Prime
    2003-11-11 23:06:37
     

    I think we've about done our dash with this one. It's been fun. Would you be happy for me to send it as a sequence to paper wasp (Aus).

    Pat

  11.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-11-12 06:52:39
     

    pat, it would be an honor




    "a gift for all seasons"; to patricia prime


    time of thanksgiving
    the tree seems bare ...
    fear of the approaching year
    my winter
    the best lacks being material
    eternal joy
    her extended friendship

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