new year
a thin layer of rainwater
coats the window


—Harold Bowes
        

Originally appeared in Acorn #9: Fall 2002

About the author: Harold Bowes has been published in several haiku journals, both electronic and paper, and has appeared in the Red Moon Anthology. He edits Alba, an ezine emphasizing short poetry.

Write to him at heb at oregontrail.net.

 

Responses to the haiku for 6 January 2003 by Harold Bowes

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-27 07:41:01
     

    i wonder...

    there' s definitely two trains of thoughts, but for the life of me, they seem completely disjoined.
    "new year" leaves such a preponderance of ideas to possibly follow, but surely not the 2nd and 3rd lines.
    the second and third lines appear to have a mind of their own, and "rainwater" seems redundant into itself. perhaps, simply rain.

    a thought comes to mind on the feasibility of a remake, along the lines of something less broad as new year and even an additional suggestion.

    case in point:


    early morning dew
    a thin layer of rain
    coats the window


    however, this is indeed a haiku moment

  2.  
    Harold Bowes (heb at oregontrail dot net)
    2003-04-28 23:25:31
     

    "The New Year is a season by itself."

    --R. H. Blyth, Haiku, Volume 2

    There are the five seasons: Spring, Summer, Autumn, Winter, and the New Year. This haiku is an attempt to write a New Years haiku. The window is last year, solid and fixed, "a past which is still present" (quoting from Blyth again) while the rainwater is the New Year, fluid and filled with possibility and thin, so thin, just getting started you know. The use of the word "rainwater" -- well, it's intended to emphasize the layering of a sheet of rain over the surface of the window. This haiku may be along the lines of Tozan's haiku:

    The wind
    In the pine tree on the peak --
    The very being of New Year's Day.

    Or maybe not.

    On reflection, and after reading several examples in Blyth, I might have changed the first line from "new year" to "the first day of the year." But, you know, it's fun to workshop haiku.

    Harold

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-05-30 08:05:30
     

    midway through the new year -
    thin coat of dust
    on the window sill

    -

  4.  
    Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)
    2004-06-09 02:18:17
     

    In the night
    watching through the fat ice -
    twofold windows

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-12-30 05:25:46
     

    old dark year
    at an end
    the drought, as the snow falls

    -

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