spinning 
the big dipper
with a finger


—Barry Goodmann
        

About the author: Barry Goodmann (bgoodmann at aol.com) is a poet, writer and editor who lives in the New York metropolitan area. He has published poetry on several websites and in various literary magazines.

Responses to the haiku for 20 January 2003 by Barry Goodmann

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-20 09:41:46
     

    and...???

    surely, there is more

    even though the haiku contains fragmented sentences, never should it contain fragmented thoughts......

    i would be suggestive here, however, i wasn't there for the spinning event.

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-21 07:18:58
     

    barry, in continuing:

    surprisingly, i do have one eye focused on my "own creations". however, as you know acceptance is a very slow process. presently, i do it for the joy of it, and if destiny intervenes, you can brag on once upon a time having gone one-on-one with me.

    you give me more credit, be it good or bad, than i am due.

    are my words really being read???
    wow, i had no idea.

    i do believe you have me confused with another, i ponder at what point in time i proclaimed myself to be "the expert". i am merely expressing my "opinion", just as you are free to do, and are doing.

    "potshots", is this equally associated to your acts, as you express the things in "your" life you like or dislike, in your daily journey, or perhaps you are in agreement with all you encounter. i certainly trust not.

    sometimes, one has to come down off the mountain, and look eye to eye with one's "followers".

    to be cont.

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-21 07:23:08
     

    barry, in continuing:


    "constructive and knowledgeable", two interesting terms. they have the appearance of appeasement, buttering one up, even when it is not worthy, a "yes-man", these i admit, i have failings in.

    to present my credentials would prove nothing, other than to satisfy the hollow ego, then i would have joined the club.

    i wonder when man/woman first began to speak, if other's around him/her wondered or gave some kind of indication of "how can they say that".

    a suggestion, mind you, as all my comments have been, the things that seemed somewhat more impressionable to me, though in opposition to others, that is my prerogative; barry, focus not on taking offense, be prepared to explain what one has done, if the reasoning taken by others seemingly have fallen short of the author's intentions.

    to be cont.

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-21 07:26:04
     

    hello barry,
    as for my posting all over "tinywords" website, not true, there still remain a few i have yet to encounter.

    as for my having better things to do, possibly, but that is personal, as i wonder, did you have something better to do, other than to write me, or was this the opportune time. however, you took the time. please, explain the appropriate amount of time and the priority that needs to be taken by "me".

    the second, minute, hour, day, week, month, year, or even century, i have no control over when the author was expressive enough to take pen in hand; but, it is today, i have been given the opportunity to interact with them.

    to be continued one more time.

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-21 07:27:24
     

    barry, the end is near.


    i saw the word "expert" again, strangely i never conceived that, i am an outspoken observer, would you deny that of me; some would even apply the term "verbose" to me.

    i would assume you are feeling better, after having expressed yourself, of which i would never think to deny you. over the course of history, haven't we had enough of this, this denial procedure.

    after sending your e-mail, i wondered if possibly, just possibly, you had thought better if a remake had taken place, as oppose to having been hasty in your responsiveness.

    but then, i am not the "expert", and in all i have said, i could be wrong, this i freely admit.

  6.  
    barry
    2003-04-21 09:33:37
     

    Bob, Please take your meds already.
    Thanks.

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-21 13:51:43
     

    so sad...
    so simple a reply
    truly an outcry
    me oh my

    i can't respond to that barry, for i feel it is beneath "your" dignity.

    yes, tis true
    the child in us never dies.
    to throw a stone
    then to run home
    while all the while saying, it was not "i"

    indeed, for lack of an honest reply



    again, i take to the soap box.

    vanity, can anyone explain
    to huff and puff
    only to fall down

    so vain
    in vain
    the ends truly not justified

    hush
    hush
    can't stand to hear it

    to run and hide
    not realizing...
    the burden's still carried inside

    pride
    egotism
    to satisfy


    only until...
    when one's finger points
    not at "i"

  8.  
    W.E.G. (the_renga_master at hotmail dot com)
    2003-09-04 18:14:26
     

    to Barry Goodmann, yours 20e2003,,tinywords.c;
    spinning /the big dipper/with a finger
    i normally don't like senryu, but i certainly like this one.I live in Queens, it says you live near NYC.

  9.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-02-03 10:41:51
     

    spinning
    his diamond ring sparkles
    with every thrust

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-05-30 16:32:00
     

    silence, night walk --
    revolving around me
    the stars


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