approaching storm --
his daughter hasn't told him
about the car dent


—Deborah P. Kolodji
        

About the author: Deborah P. Kolodji
Pasadena, California
dkolodji at aol.com

Deborah P Kolodji is the President of the Science Fiction Poetry Association and the editor of Amaze: The Cinquain Journal.

Her work has appeared in many journals, both on and off the web. Unfinished Book, her chapbook of haiku, cinquains, and other short poems, was published by Shadows Ink Publications.

Responses to the haiku for 20 February 2003 by Deborah P. Kolodji

  1.  
    craig McLanachan (cramar at actrix dot co dot nz)
    2003-03-07 03:02:29
     

    Clever and witty. Nice element of surprise.

  2.  
    2003-03-13 18:38:43
     

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    This is a very interesting perspective.
    You'd rather expect:

    approaching storm --
    hasn't told her dad
    about the car dent


    since it's the daughter who knows of the approaching storm.
    So we have a situation where the central actor - the dad - doesn't even know about this approaching (non-)climatic event, that we've been let in on.
    Nice tension, very effective.

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-12-26 23:36:49
     

    storm approaching
    another ...
    catches her eye

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-02-03 09:13:12
     

    open secret
    his preference to keep quiet
    about his sexual orientation

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-03 21:11:50
     

    horns sound
    somewhere in the tunnel --
    the all's clear signal

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