construction site --
sizing up a new high-rise,
the pigeons


—Charles Trumbull

Previously published in frogpond 19:1 (May 1996); Electronic Poetry Network (Shreveport, La., Public Library), July 12, 2000

About the author: Charles Trumbull is an editor for Encyclopaedia Britannica and lives in Evanston, Illinois. He has been writing haiku since 1991. He was editor (1996-2002) of the Haiku Society of America Newsletter, president of the HSA in 2004 and 2005, and an organizer of the Haiku North America 1999 conference. He is currently editor of Modern Haiku and proprietor of Deep North Press, a publisher of haiku books.

No Web page yet; e-mail: trumbullc at comcast dot net

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Responses to the haiku for 1 April 2003 by Charles Trumbull

  1.  
    Guy
    2003-04-01 18:18:24
     

    Impressive bio, but the poem missed me. It could be that my aggressive dislike for pigeons overwhelmed my ability to absorb the poem. All and all, would have rather have read only the bio, which was much more interesting than the art.

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-02 05:47:02
     

    there was this desire of "time" being a buffer zone, alas, here's my critique so close to "guy's".

    "undesirable...
    being not the case
    rash setting in"


    upon first reading, i was thinking charles had missed the point. as some would say, "bob, you think too much".
    true, this being the case, for i was wondering the pigeons' vantage point.
    with that thought in mind, i had the words "bad haiku" come to mind.
    not true, upon my second or maybe it was the fourth reading, i saw what charles had done. yes, i even saw the pigeons looking on from across the street, with each coo sounding as though they were giving their assessment.

    so, there is to be drawn a line through "bad haiku", and in it's place, substituting "good haiku".

    for "guy", possibly just possibly, a cleansing of one's palate is in order, before engagement of one's critique.

  3.  
    David
    2003-04-02 10:04:28
     

    I really enjoyed this - the image was vivid for me. It went as far as giving me the season and weather (although that would probably be different for others) and the feeling of oneness with the pigeons, all of us watching the construction.

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo (bagiruang at yahoo dot com)
    2004-01-07 10:39:52
     

    construction site -
    eyeing me, a half covered
    plastic doll

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-05 19:27:56
     

    my imagination -
    sizing up the new sunrise
    lovers

    -

  6.  
    Vasile Moldovan
    2009-01-12 04:13:07
     

    A branch of olive
    in the pigeon's beak-
    nest in building

  7.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-01-17 15:47:34
     

    jainism-
    sun rising too
    winter's umble man

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