in the wet snow
even the squirrel's tail
is bedraggled


—Helen Ruggieri
        

About the author: Helen Ruggieri lives in Olean, NY and has had publications recently in Mainichi Daily News (Japan) and Bottle Rocket.

 

Responses to the haiku for 16 April 2003 by Helen Ruggieri

  1.  
    deborah russell (sellwein at hotmail dot com)
    2003-04-16 11:12:56
     

    An interesting visual and haiku. I believe the articles could be trimmed and maintain the image :

    wet snow -
    even the squirrel's tail
    bedraggled

  2.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-04-16 11:17:37
     

    "Bedraggled" brings a smile. Wasn't it Mark Twain who said that the difference between the right word and the almost-right word, is like the difference between lightning and a lightning bug?!

  3.  
    Todd
    2003-04-16 13:52:34
     

    the visual is almost there, but "even" draws my focus from the squirrel to the surrounding environment to the extent that everything gets jumbled up and goes out of focus and leaves me wondering what I'm supposed to see.

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-16 23:38:57
     

    i could picture all of helen's words, but it is what ellen said that aided my thinking; yes, for lack of a better word or words in this case, and i didn't smile.
    even in the wettest snow, i picture the squirrel's tail still held high, i wonder if we have a sickly squirrel. this, then, upset my appreciation of the haiku; those darn questions being asked.

    i found my fellow panelists' comments, being of more interest.

  5.  
    Damone Harris (stepdaddymone at yahoo dot com)
    2003-04-17 01:44:08
     

    to bland, not enough image.

  6.  
    Michael Meyerhofer
    2003-04-28 12:14:04
     

    I agree with deborah russell's comment, but I also wanted to add that this was a delightful haiku, which gave me a clear image of the melting winter and made me feel great sympathy for the squirrel. ;)

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-08 20:53:26
     

    dust and dirt --
    the duck
    waggles a tail feather

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