Gazing up in the parking lot
I mistook the streetlight
for the moon!


—Korinne O'Laughlin
        

About the author: Korinne O'Laughlin: Chiefstar at webtv dot net

 

Responses to the haiku for 23 April 2003 by Korinne O'Laughlin

  1.  
    Stella Siador
    2003-04-23 15:11:11
     

    Well, things like that happen. Thought it was amusing just the same. Also, thought the first line sounded a bit long, but who am I to say?

  2.  
    paul m.
    2003-04-23 15:32:03
     

    While this is a pretty scene, there is nothing for me to discover here. I have been told everything. I have been told what to see as well as how to interpret it. The oft-said adage "show don't tell" is oft-said for a reason.

  3.  
    2003-04-23 19:01:59
     

    A Winnie-the-Pooh moment, isn't it? I like the picture but I'm not sure it's a haiku.
    I would argue that the 1st line is unnecessary:

    Gazing up
    well, how else are you going to see the moon (or the streetlight)?
    in the parking lot
    --or anywhere else, what is the difference?


    I wonder does anyone remember this:
    streetlight
    above a concrete post
    the moon

    S. Mason
    at Shiki Haiku Salon 10/31/99

    Contact

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-23 19:12:21
     

    stella, you are "STELLA"

    i took it to be a two lines haiku

    stella, we are even more alike, for what do i know


    so true, paul

    aren't we told "all"



    into my eyes...
    star dust
    meteor falls to earth
    up springs something green


    i tried to rethink, redo, remake, reinvent, retort, reread, retrorse, revamp, revalue,
    but to this i resort, resolve,
    perhaps for the fifth time, my need to reexamine

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-23 23:11:51
     

    integrity...

    in one's life time, how much we say, has been said in a similar fashion, before.

    to think anything is original, even that isn't an original thought.

    norman, closeness, nor similarity counts

    if only one knew how many times, what one says and thinks has been said before.


    case in point:


    "i love you", simple, but surely this phrase has been said at least one trillion and one times
    before. the individuals feeling as though they are it's original author



    after all is said and done, we all are but a body of "one"

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-23 23:29:43
     

    northern bound geese
    beneath the cloud
    no rain


    nope, i wasn't finished, norman, we are a product of relative thinking.

    so easy to be inspired, what do you think stella

    blue sky
    caressing the mountain
    last of winter's snow


    if one has read even one haiku, one's mind is germinated.


    case in point:

    the two pieces were created, by my focusing on norman's reference, in a matter of seconds.

    even the great masters were influenced, rather humbling thought

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-24 00:09:59
     

    just one more:



    no streetlight
    peering above the corner pole
    no moon



    think about it

  8.  
    2003-04-24 04:38:32
     

    It seems I need to clarify:
    I was not questioning Corinne's integrity, merely pointing up similarities with another haiku (and a WTP story!) I think we all know that this happens all the time.Contact

  9.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-04-24 06:35:45
     

    some do, some don't, norman
    so for those who don't, even though the signs are there, perhaps clarification was in order.

    in the dark
    we all look alike
    beneath the skin



    we all are victims of assimilation through parentage and social stages. the images, and sounds we make, all have this similarity.
    life's a carrier of contagion.

  10.  
    Korinne
    2003-04-29 03:48:26
     

    Any comment
    is a welcome comment
    in every variation!

    Thanks all, Korinne

  11.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-01-05 09:16:03
     

    silent fear
    mist over the
    graveyard moon

  12.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-09 22:45:13
     

    bright, shining night
    so many stars ...
    i never knew, could ever exist

    -

  13.  
    martin
    2004-12-02 20:22:31
     

    winter lot
    the heat of the car
    in the night

  14.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-01-01 03:58:22
     

    memories -
    moon's not out tonight
    where it normally cross the sky

    -

    the barn owl screech
    through the pines

  15.  
    Ronny in Costa Rica
    2007-11-09 19:00:55
     

    When darkness shrouds
    Any light we truly see
    Leads us to be free

  16.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-01-18 07:37:36
     

    nice to discover, first-hand, what ku's have voiced. they mention* the moon in some unique fashion to a streetlight. then, it happens, my magical moment. not to be mistaken for a streetlight, however it's close proximity was inspirational. i sighed while staring; but not reaching for paper nor pen.
    -
    things mindful of*

    "spotting the bullshit
    from a blimp--
    in a fog"
    -

    nice ku, k o

  17.  
    Ronny (costarianet at hotmail dot com)
    2009-11-18 20:48:12
     

    Love may seem to hide
    Behind our ego or the mind
    But it always shines

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