winter night
I keep the telemarketer
talking


—Joanne Morcom

This haiku is the fourth place winner in the April 2003 tinywords haiku contest, winning the author a copy of Jeff Winke's What's Not There: Selected Haiku, published by Deep North Press, plus a copy of Dennis Dutton's 90 Frogs, published by bottle rockets press.



From the judges' comments: "transparent ... speaks well to the loneliness of winter."

About the author: Joanne Morcom is a writer and social worker in Calgary, Alberta. Her award winning poetry and flash fiction have appeared in a variety of print and electronic publications. Her poetry postcards are available from pooka press and her scifaiku chapbook, "A Nameless Place," is available from Sam's Dot Publishing or from the author at her own website.

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Responses to the haiku for 29 April 2003 by Joanne Morcom

  1.  
    deborah russell
    2003-04-29 19:30:22
     

    I like the humour in this. I imagined Andy Rooney.

    Deborah

  2.  
    Michael Meyerhofer (angry_seraph at yahoo dot com)
    2003-04-30 13:48:21
     

    Honest, simple, funny, lovely... lonely.

  3.  
    cinzia
    2003-05-02 13:00:42
     

    Clever!

  4.  
    Paul Fahey (pafahey at sbceo dot org)
    2003-05-02 18:15:50
     

    Sad and wonderfully wistful. A terrific description of loneliness.

    Just great.

  5.  
    Tad Wojnicki (wojnicki at aol dot com)
    2003-05-02 19:08:28
     

    What amazes me in this haiku is the clarity of one single urge--to stay connected to anyone, for any price, even by deluding oneself.

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-05-04 19:54:15
     

    even basho had his critic in shiki

    i find myself smiling at the commentaries being produced.

    i hesitated to comment on this piece, while being curious as to what others would say.

    first, my thoughts on joanne's creation.

    most definitely signs of loneliness, desperation, or even humor, however what caught my attention was the usage of three lines rather than two. one should understand this is totally acceptable.

    the usage of 3 lines disrupts the flow of the moment, in an attempt to create a sense of pivoting.

    case in point:

    winter night
    keep the telemarketer talking

    "i" would think "i" is understood, so it's removal presents nothing destructive to joanne's thought.

    to be cont.

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-05-04 20:00:12
     

    in continuing:


    ah yes, from before basho, then basho followed by a host of others. buson, kyoshi, shiki, hisajo, ippekiro, kakio, suju, koi, and a host of others. though each studying what preceded, proceeded to leave their thoughts imprinted on the haiku, even the word haiku isn't original.

    there are times, one should stray from the well worn traveled path.

    my comment on the comments of the others, i'll leave unsaid, i believe in this outing i have said enough...

  8.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-01-05 08:59:58
     

    winter night
    this japanese woman
    in the pub with her dog

  9.  
    lana b
    2004-05-25 01:21:23
     

    neighbour party
    unseen guests are known
    by voices

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-18 18:47:52
     

    twilight --
    there are the answers
    should tomorrow come

    -

  11.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-10-15 06:07:21
     

    dreary autumn morn
    tedious newscaster --
    rain fleeing my thoughts

    -

  12.  
    yvon morcom (yvon1 at ihug dot com dot au)
    2005-01-09 17:47:46
     

    who are you
    have you any realatives in australia?

  13.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-01-10 06:42:49
     

    angel, wings extended
    a purple grackle
    glides in on the dawn

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