a cactus bloom's
yellow translucence
blacktop highway


—Allen McGill
        

About the author: Allen McGill
San Miguel de Allende, Mexico
aljons at yahoo.com

Originally from NYC, Allen lives, writes, acts and directs theatre in Mexico. His published fiction, non-fiction, poetry, plays, etc., have appeared in print as well as on line: NY Times, The Writer, Newsday, Retrozine, Laughter Loaf, Flashquake, Herons Nest, Cenotaph, TempsLibres, Autumn Leaves, Poetic Voices,Amaze-Cinquain, Bottle Rocket, Frogpond, Modern Haiku, World Haiku Review, many others.

 

Responses to the haiku for 28 May 2003 by Allen McGill

  1.  
    deborah russell (sellwein at hotmail dot com)
    2003-05-29 07:59:21
     

    I like the combination of colour and contrast in elements this makes the haiku work. It is a basic/classic solution that works. Soft and hard, pale and stark, etc. Thanks for sharing - Deborah

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-03 23:04:36
     

    a cactus bloom's
    yellow translucence

    these first two lines "had" me mesmerized.
    then, i read the third line. i felt as though i didn't see the truck coming; road kill came to mind.

    "translucence": allowing light to pass through, however, not allowing forms or colors of objects
    to be distinctly visible.

    i am in agreement with deborah on her analysis of
    colour, contrast, basic, classic, soft, hard, pale and stark.

    but, i fail to see the connection.

    the third line seems to have been left out on a limb.


    a thought comes to mind:


    a cactus bloom's
    yellow translucence...
    blacktop highway's center line

  3.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-01-04 08:26:51
     

    desert cactuses
    triumphant atheletes
    raise their fists

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-20 20:48:00
     

    in the crack
    reaching cross the pale sidewalk ...
    a yellow flowering weed

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